Statement of Intent Feedback and Learner Response

1)
WWW:
Addresses the key concepts of media, overall concept matches the brief and the target audience is addressed. Well organised and generally uses media language frequently. Bullet points work well.

EBI:
Media language lacks depth for top level and camera shots lack detail of what it's trying to communicate. Needs a bit more on representation and stereotyping. Remove unnecessary words to bring down word count and explain how you will use music to create meanings/atmosphere.

2)
I don't believe that I will need to change my narrative as it meets the brief well and is able to meet the target audience through a hobby that is associated with the target audience. I do think that changing a few of the camera shots to make it seem a lot more interesting and engaging for the audience.

3)
I can improve the use of media terminology by going into more depth and further explaining the effect of utilising the terminology. This can be done by involving who proposed the theory and what it entails.

4)
I will address the key concept of representation in my next draft by reducing the amount of words I use in the other sections in order to delve deeper into representation for higher marks.

5)
I think that the target audience would enjoy my advert because it involves dancing which is something a lot of young people do whether they're good at it or not. By seeing someone who is good at dancing they will wish to be like him and seeing someone who's not as good may allow others to relate to him.